When I went to Bora Bora with my family I had the best holiday of my life. I have this one memory, which was the first morning there was a little car that sprayed insect repellent. I remember the little truck leaving this huge thick cloud of smoke that was supposed to be the insect repellent. I was with my sister when I saw the truck. We both had the weirdest look on our faces. First of all, Bora Bora is on the Equator. Second of all, we had never seen such a vehicle in our lives. I thought for a second that they were spraying toxic gas and we were all going to die. So me and my sister ran into our bedroom for cover. After we saw some people walking on the road were they sprayed, we walked to the restaurant for some breakfast.
At breakfast we saw all of the family and they were completely normal. We asked about the little truck that sprayed the gas. The waiter said that if they didn't sprayed for insects they would infest the whole island. I thought of what that would do and I got frightened. Then I thought of the little truck again. The feeling was shocking, only because I was a little boy. Later that day when the sun went down I saw the little truck again. I still had the same reaction, because the amount of smoke that came out was like a Diesel truck. I will never forget that memory. The good thing was that I got over it quickly, so I did enjoy my vacation.
This was one great trip. The memory is a weird one, but it will always stay with me. More than anything, I think it grabbed my attention. I would have to ask my older sister if she remembers the insect truck. She is older, so I don't think it was that shocking for her to see. That island was something special, I don't think we'll ever have the whole family like together again.
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I think this blog entry was fascinating. It had no grammatical or spelling errors. Also, it was very well written. I love how you used to be so innocent and cute when you were little. I would not imagine you thinking something like that right now. I can see how much you have grown, and you have grown a lot. Keep it with the good work Thomas. I really enjoyed reading your story.
ResponderEliminarThis is indeed a really fascinating story, I totally forgot I was reading a blog entry. The story gave me the feeling of it being a memoir, it is way too god for being just a story. I noticed you didn't have spelling or grammar mistakes, nice! You really told the story in such a detailed and personal way that it makes the story truly unique. Your writing skill level is so high that even when you're writing just about a small event you make the reader want to finish the whole story. The only thing I have to say about your essay is: nothing better than a perfect length essay with no mistakes at all. Congrats Thomas!
ResponderEliminarThis is a great Story, I bet it was asome to go to Bora Bora. I bet is nice their. Are they a lot of chicks? xD. HAHA you though it was poisons Gas?
ResponderEliminarThats funny, but you are right. It is good to be careful,specially in this days. You havent seen those trucks before, they pass be town all the time. That sounds like a great vacations, hope you had fun. Great job in the Grammar and Spelling
Thomas, I found your blog entry really fascinating. It didn[t feel as reading an assignment for our discipline, but more of a free writing. As you kept on reading, you just wanted to read more. The feeling you got of actually learning something about your past was really amazing you just wanted to keep on going. It was so amazing that you didn[t feel as doing a homework assignment but more of an adventure and enjoying our free time. This was just so amazing I didn[t notice any spelling nor grammar mistakes! I think your writing skills are increasing as time goes on and I am very proud of you. I think you should still proofread your work and add some more ideas or details. The ones you have are really awesome but it would be even MORE awesome if you had some more. Keep up the good job, Thomas! I really hope to read more of your entertaining stories you have had.
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